“我把贵校作为第一志愿，如果能让我合格，我非常感激” 请问英文该怎么说比较地道？谢谢

I regard your esteemed university as my first choice. I will be very grateful if my application is accepted.
后一句如果用apprecaite可以说I will highly appreciate it if my application is accepted.

I take your first choice, as if to let me qualified, I am very grateful

Your school/university/college(具体情况要看你申请的学校是哪个级别的，高中用school,综合性大学用university,专科学院用college) is my first choice and I will appreciate it very much if you can accept my application.

I take your first choice, as if to let me qualified, I am very grateful。
the acceptance of my application would be appreciated 是
如果接受了我的申请,我将不胜感激

I put your school as the first choice, I will be grateful if I can pass